I think the story is too straightforward to be elongated too much. “Night Ride,” as it is tentatively named, is a road movie, and I don’t want to spend too much time off the freeway. The journey is ultimately the film’s destination. Also, the moments off the road feel like exposition. Sure, there is room for subplots—but I don’t feel inclined to write them into the story. With such a strong A-plot, it just never felt right to dilute it with extra stories.
I am also wary of writing more scenes in the ride itself. I know how limiting it is to film an entire movie in a car. There needs to be a balance between inside and outside the car.
I have a few ideas on how to add pages, but right now, I need to take some time off, re-read the script as if I just stumbled upon it in a few weeks, and see where those new edits take me. I know that the characters lack enough depth, so the next scenes I write should fill them out as sympathetic, three-dimensional people.
I believe in this script and I know taking time off cannot affect how much I like it. Sure, many screenplays die between the second and third drafts, but for once in my writing life, I have faith.
What do you when faced with a short story? Should I just accept the screenplay’s length and move on? Give up? Keep writing? What do you think?